L.G.M.S., short entry. (rate please?)

I enjoyed it, and I would like to read more of it. I don't really have much to critique on though. The only thing I can think of is that most of the time I believe profanity sort of takes away from the story, but in a story like this it fits.

thanks for the input. as for the profanity... well, i try to limit it as much as possible in most things i "write," but with this setting and plot, and this specific scene, there was no way to avoid using it. it helped add to the starkness that is the reality for these girls. and as for the characters themselves, the main sisters arent normally ones to curse. this is, i think, going to be one of the first times they have cursed at all. though the "leaders" of the pack of orphans tend to be crude, only one, not listed, curses a lot. though, her story is a bit more dark, and it involves an aspect of life id much rather avoid, but i cannot with her, so...

all in all this was mostly a motivator for me to see if i could write this. seeing this makes me want to consider handing in a rough copy to my english professor and having him see what he thinks of it. =/