I don't want to be a jerk, a grammar nazi or anything, I just think that without those few mistakes it would be better.
As I see* or As I've seen*?, your pain*, your name*.
Anyway, it's a nice poem, did you post your first one?
EDIT: Should've looked before asking. I like this poem more than the first one.
As I see* or As I've seen*?, your pain*, your name*.
Anyway, it's a nice poem, did you post your first one?
EDIT: Should've looked before asking. I like this poem more than the first one.