2010-12-01, 10:21 PM
Up to the start of part three so far.
You used "world" in place of "word" in some spots, unless that was intentional.
I liked the paranthetical references. Notice that you're going through and fixing typos, also make sure to avoid comma splices and just general wording of some things. take for instance the bolded from this paragraph in part 5:
Overall, pretty nice work.
You used "world" in place of "word" in some spots, unless that was intentional.
I liked the paranthetical references. Notice that you're going through and fixing typos, also make sure to avoid comma splices and just general wording of some things. take for instance the bolded from this paragraph in part 5:
Spoiler
Overall, pretty nice work.

