masterpiece

personally i think you need to stop caring. if YOU like it, then use it. the original needed work, as can be said for anything in its initial form. lay down an idea, and come up with something. figure out whats wrong with it, then fix it. if youre satisfied, stick with it. if not, then go back and revise and repair it. stop trying to please others because its a losing battle.

IMO, its better. still agreeing that wynaut's breaking the 4th wall, but its better.