2010-02-17, 04:27 PM
Kawasari Mimoto Wrote:Over-used some effects. Unless you wanted it to seem 'dramatic' like a movie or something, I supposed. If you were aiming for that, 8/10.
That.
Oh, also, you tried too hard to make it motivational, that you threw away all shreds of originality.
1. Overused, overused music (so overused, I have to use the word twice!)
2. The overused effects hurt the eyes. They're cool for like...10 seconds, and then they get old. If you cant justify using them, dont use them.
3. Overused plot...that "I cant do it without friends" thing is starting to get old, especially when 7463124 videos have used it already.
A few things:
1. Videos that end up being motivational usually arent labeled as that by the author; they're deemed that by the audience that watches it.
2. Its good that you had a variety of scenes instead of just 5 minutes at skeles or whatnot
3. The whole pap friends thing was pretty well done (albeit overused-the theme-...you found a creative way to represent it though)
What you've done here, plenty of people have done before. What will make yours stand out? Why would they watch yours instead of someone else's motivational hero video. You have to have something that's different, something that's distinctly yours, instead of just redoing ideas presented by others (ex. VasDeferen's forward/rewind). There are some original parts (As I mentioned, the friends part), and that's a good start, but there's just not enough to make yours stand out enough to be distinctly "motivational" as you want it.