2009-11-20, 07:33 PM
FelixTM Wrote:I am in no way saying this to justify anything (because I agree and was worried it would seem too sudden), but we had a 2500 word limit on this story. I typically go in with SO much, and then realize I'm going to blow past the limit. It's challenging. Honestly I don't think I'm very good at finding the proper pace for such a small space (lol). Even focusing more on trying to meet the limit this time, I think I came up like 64 words or something over. Not a big deal, though.
From the other thread, I kinda got the idea that you were going to do another story for SP. That being said, the premise of the story is very good, but I don't think it translates well into a short story. I'm sure everyone would agree that it is challenging to write with word limits. It felt like you cut a lot of corners and that hurt the story. I also thought you could have been a little more descriptive with the environment details. It felt awkward not knowing where things were, especially the part where the neighbor's wife leads the MC to his bedroom (lol). Leaving out the details just makes me think it could have been a lot more darker than it was. Other than that, I thought it was a good read. I'd love to see you write this again if you ever felt like it, without the word limit.