You Let The Vampires In

EDIT - Wow! That was pretty shabby. You're really good at using imagery, like very good. I hope you're in the making of writing a novel mang.

shab⋅by: –adjective, -bi⋅er, -bi⋅est.
6. inferior; not up to par in quality, performance, etc.: a shabby rendition of the sonata.

I'm hoping you meant to use another word besides shabby, because the rest of your post doesn't make sense if shabby was the word you meant to use.

And I kind of guessed that it was a page or word limit that kept you from delving more into the story (since you've obviously shown that you are capable of writing more lengthy pieces.) Still a very good read, though reading it through a second time I noticed the SP filter got you in a couple places. I guess I'm so used to the filter that I missed it the first time around.