2009-10-09, 07:31 PM
Kalovale Wrote:Policed for you.
I feel something else is still off though. Perhaps:
Just a suggestion. I can't tell what's not right with your sentences. I do grasp the idea so I guess it's okay, but I can't tell what's wrong with it seeing as I'm very hungry right now lol. I myself have always been a bad writer, I don't know if that ever changed but yeah well.. I tried.
Actually it's "Title," not "Title",
And Will, two things:
1. In the sentence "citizens of Omelas, an almost Utopian society, traps," there shouldn't be a s after traps, citizens is plural, subject-verb agreement pliz.
2. Personally, I'd start it off like "Jews were the scapegoats used by Adolf Hitler and the Nazis for all the problems Germany faced in the 1920s&30s."