2009-10-07, 10:38 PM
xLeviathan Wrote:I'm not much of a composition person, but I can tell you this needs another comma somewhere, and perhaps removal of a period after the title.
It's not bad, really. Other people might have more to say, but all I can is, make sure it flows into your 1st paragraph nicely. Essays that don't flow suck to read. Trust me. I'd know. UGH. D:
Ah, wonder how I missed that.
And yeah I know, luckily, this is just an intro paragraph
For now at least. 