2009-10-07, 10:33 PM
I'm not much of a composition person, but I can tell you this needs another comma somewhere, and perhaps removal of a period after the title.
It's not bad, really. Other people might have more to say, but all I can is, make sure it flows into your 1st paragraph nicely. Essays that don't flow suck to read. Trust me. I'd know. UGH. D:
Quote:Similarly, in Ursula Le Guin's short story “The Ones Who Walk Away From Omelas.” the citizens of Omelas, an almost Utopian society, traps a child in a basement and blames the child for anything that goes wrong.
Quote:Similarly, in Ursula Le Guin's short story, “The Ones Who Walk Away From Omelas,” the citizens of Omelas, an almost Utopian society, traps a child in a basement and blames the child for anything that goes wrong.
It's not bad, really. Other people might have more to say, but all I can is, make sure it flows into your 1st paragraph nicely. Essays that don't flow suck to read. Trust me. I'd know. UGH. D: