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A Collection
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2009-10-04, 02:45 AM
Kurtle Wrote:I loved it. The imagery of Stanza 1 is beautiful. The proceeding self interrogation proves an awe inspiring point. Wonderful conclusion as well. Also, your rhythm is interesting.
Thank you kindly. While some of the details were exaggerated (possibly because it occurred years ago), it's based on memory. I kinda wanted to do more with the "knife = penis" metaphor but didn't want to drag it out (nor could I think of a way to write more without it seeming stretched).

That being said, I would deeply appreciate criticism (anything that seems out-of-place, etc.)

P.S. [IMGSPOILER=The knife]http://img24.imageshack.us/img24/4518/theknifeinquestion.png[/IMGSPOILER]

I had scrubbed it for half an hour with steel wool to remove the blood.
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A Collection - by Providence - 2009-02-19, 03:51 PM
A Collection - by ♥Ji - 2009-02-19, 03:58 PM
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A Collection - by Providence - 2009-03-11, 11:52 PM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-03-12, 12:19 AM
A Collection - by ♥Ji - 2009-03-12, 12:23 AM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-03-12, 12:27 AM
A Collection - by ♥Ji - 2009-03-12, 04:34 AM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-03-12, 03:46 PM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-07-11, 10:39 PM
A Collection - by Mark - 2009-07-12, 04:59 AM
A Collection - by MasPan - 2009-07-12, 05:09 AM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-07-12, 05:28 AM
A Collection - by MasPan - 2009-07-12, 06:18 AM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-10-02, 07:21 PM
A Collection - by Kurtle - 2009-10-02, 09:09 PM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-10-04, 02:45 AM
A Collection - by TøbiasBlack - 2009-10-04, 02:52 AM
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A Collection - by Throes - 2009-10-07, 03:19 AM
A Collection - by Providence - 2009-10-07, 11:38 PM
A Collection - by ImagineAll - 2009-10-13, 06:24 PM
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A Collection - by chrome - 2009-11-15, 12:03 AM
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