Salguod Wrote:Chad's scene was so anti-climatic. It was also a bit awkward, specifically the rallying of the workers by the manager after Lizor ducked behind the crate. Did Chad just stand there when Lizor executed his lame plan (which went surprisingly well)? I just thought the timing was really weird.
Typo here, I think: "The wind and rain crash violently crash against the window"
Fixed, thanks for pointing out. I dunno how I miss these sometimes.
The Chad/Lizor scene hasn't reached its peak yet. He did just stand there. lol Though, everything happened pretty fast. It caught him off-guard more than anything. He didn't really have any other option, besides, unless he was to get behind the crate too and force Lizor at gunpoint. He needs Lizor, so he can't actually shoot. It's tricky.
Is there a way I could make the scene less awkward? I needed the role reversal; I couldn't have Lizor get taken out of there. But like I said, that scene isn't over yet. Chad's craftier than this.
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EDIT:
Too tired to write another tonight. I'm done with class around 10:45 AM (CDT). I'll write right when I get back. Mom's coming to visit, and we're gonna grab lunch, but I can probably finish before that. Otherwise, I should be done early afternoon at the latest. Tue/Thur are great because I only have that one morning class.
Little surprised at the decision. I thought I made this one a bit tougher, especially since you guys usually don't like to take the head-on, riskier one. I guess we'll find out if it was a good idea...