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Blech [Bleh-k]
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I would say for a critique, the main thing you lack is depth to it. There's that huge white space in the middle at the top and bottom. Between those and the lack of shading, it makes it a very flat image. Even doing a horizon line would have improved that a fair amount, though there are still enough errors elsewhere that it'd be noticeable. It doesn't have to be overdcrowded on the page, or even have a lot to it, but putting in some background and shadows can really make an image seem to pop off the page. Oh, and the overlap you had going on in the bottom left corner is a good trick to adding depth. To me, that was the best section of your drawing, and would have been even better if some shadowing had gone on to emphasize the difference in location. And while I'm on that section, the crossed legs need some work for the one sitting up higher. Eh anyway, don't want you to think it was terrible or anything, I just tend to start rambling on when critiquing something. XP

As far as comments go, I'd say it's a very good try. I think if you want to do a rose next time, you should replace the o with it or or put it inside the o. Another possibility, to use up some of the space above and below, would be to have it twined around the letters, and then blooming above it.
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Blech [Bleh-k] - by Milelke - 2009-08-19, 06:52 PM
Blech [Bleh-k] - by ElectricSix - 2009-08-19, 07:14 PM
Blech [Bleh-k] - by Milelke - 2009-08-19, 07:28 PM

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