Short Story I Wrote For Class

So during this semester, I had to write two short stories for one of my classes. Seeing as the second one's final draft is due on Tuesday, I was wondering if any of you would mind reading it and telling me what you think. Don't analyze it too much - though it's fine to do that, I'd like to hear what you think about the story itself. I know it's not that good, but I'd like to make it better if I can, and some unbiased input would help.

Because copy+pasting it makes it look like a wall of text due to spacing, you can download the .doc file here:

http://www.megaupload.com/?d=3JA43ZD9

Thanks. ^_^