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Amateur Failure - Yorckie - 2012-09-29
Last week I was working on the cover for an amateur attempt of a one-shot manga. C:
I've been developing the story and characters for some time, with the supervision of a japanese friend whose mates are willing to lauch the first rookie and national manga magazine on the city I'm currently living. It was rejected, so I was wondering if I should keep with this since I don't know if it has any real potential. Any critic will be well recieved.
Spoiler
![[Image: yakugai_no_kerube_cover_by_yorckie-d5fow8i.jpg]](http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/266/2/8/yakugai_no_kerube_cover_by_yorckie-d5fow8i.jpg)
Amateur Failure - ShinkuDragon - 2012-09-29
it looks amazing if you ask me.
Amateur Failure - MuscleWizard - 2012-09-29
It's only an amateur fail because it looks professional.
Very well done.
Amateur Failure - raizoo - 2012-09-29
I don't know what the person in the back is doing. The neck/shouder area is very muddy to me, like the right shoulder looks dislocated. You should try taking their pose/the pose you wanted to do because I think it's also a perspective issue.
The guy in the front has really poofy clothing. Not sure if it was your intention or not with the top, but the shorts look weird. I feel like you could pull his upper body more because it looks like it's all on the same plane. It's like he has a really short torso and is leaning forward slightly.
Nice job on the foreshortening overall. Very clean. I like your style, but a lot of parts just feel flat to me.