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Mugged By JezzaRules - JezzaRules - 2008-11-10
This is a new comic I made that involved edits to my maplestory characters face and the charmander for the first time. And yes I tried to make the character in the 4th panel resemble IsaacGS.
Spoiler
![[Image: Mugged.jpg]](http://i533.photobucket.com/albums/ee336/JezzaRules/Mugged.jpg)
So any comments and constructive critism?
Mugged By JezzaRules - Kurtle - 2008-11-10
I don't know but the whole charmander thing needs to be removed. It creeps me out and takes away from whatever you are producing. Also, try to make a joke/storyline that will connect to everyone even those on different levels.
Mugged By JezzaRules - Mark - 2008-11-10
My suggestion? Try to convey your "punchline" without using so many words. You have a case of 'Buckley-itis' (See: CAD comics.) Comics are supposed to be a visual media, and not so much on words.
![[Image: muggedyz2.png]](http://img357.imageshack.us/img357/3470/muggedyz2.png)
As you can see, the last 3 panels are pretty pointless when the punchline was delivered in the 4th panel.
Mugged By JezzaRules - JezzaRules - 2008-11-10
So less words eh? Well I can try that.
And the word 'buckleytitis' kinda insulted me Opeth, it makes me feel as if I fail at everything
. Ah well I do have to admit I've got terrible luck.
Mugged By JezzaRules - Mark - 2008-11-10
I didn't mean to, it's just how I describe comics with WORDSWORDSWORDS.
Mugged By JezzaRules - Blankout - 2008-11-10
I think the comic would be easier to read if you corrected the grammar errors and internet speak, such as "u" in the third panel.
Mugged By JezzaRules - JezzaRules - 2008-11-10
Opeth Wrote:I didn't mean to, it's just how I describe comics with WORDSWORDSWORDS.
I know you didn't mean to and you're just trying to help out.
Yea you're right about the too much words part. Would it be better if I just removed the last two panels? I reckon they're unneccessary.
Mugged By JezzaRules - cshaobu914802 - 2008-11-29
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