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Three Paragraphs. - TøbiasBlack - 2010-06-11 back in high school i wrote this, and just a while ago i was hit with a desire to write some short story. when i opened word i saw this sitting on the side panel for "recently saved works" (which shows just how little i use MSWord. =/) Anyways, this is just the first three paragraphs of that, and id like SP to give me some criticism on this if you'd be so kind. but, please try to keep it constructive is all i ask. Past Wrote:If your reading this, let me just tell you this story is a true retelling of my life. Not some make-believe fantasy like you would see in a cartoon, no; this is as true a story as any page in history. First off, my name is Arthur P. Thurgood, and I am 54 years old. I was in the United States of America, in 2012; the year that the world was plunged into turmoil. Thank you. Three Paragraphs. - Pikamemnon - 2010-06-11 When u mentioned friday the 13th, I thought that u were making some kind of horror thing. Besides that I just think that it could use some more action. Three Paragraphs. - TøbiasBlack - 2010-06-15 Pikamemnon Wrote:When u mentioned friday the 13th, I thought that u were making some kind of horror thing. Besides that I just think that it could use some more action. like i said, its only the beginning three paragraphs to it. thanks to refinding this ive been working on something else, which is more an off-and-on project, but im going to at least work on it to prove i can still write sh'it other than poetry. and about him being born on friday 13th, its more a setup for how his life is a bit unlucky. |